Similar to comments from other reviewers, I liked the concept and basic story line of the adventure, but it seemed a bit "rushed" to completion. Another round of edits or review would likely clear up most things. Sentence structure and word choices are sometimes awkward (a couple of places seemed to have had a spell-checking program insert an incorrect word -- "dryer," for example, in part 3); missing commas caused me to have to pause or re-read sections; adjustments in part 2A were reversed; charts (part 2C) and options (part 3) were missing. A character "Dori" is mentioned (as possibly a primary character), but does not come up later.
I guess from a price point/persepctive, I expected more. I like the story, though, and the introduction to the Canvas Domain of Delight.
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